I’ve been concentrating on my own fiction lately,
working to complete a new collection of short stories and an additional
long-ish stand-alone story (Summer of ’69)
with an eye towards publication sometime this fall. Of course, this doesn't mean I've gone cold turkey on reading other people's books or making notes for future reviews. We'll be looking at some exceptionally fine, exciting titles over the next several months here on EFTBB; see below (*) for a list of upcoming notices.
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My lastest title, Mr.Friday’s Midlife Crisis was published in November of 2012, and something
had been bugging me about it for a while. There were some issues with “head-hopping”
in a few of the scenes. I was aware, however vaguely, that this was a flaw in the
story, but wasn’t convinced it was a fatal flaw, nor was I quite sure of how to
go about fixing it without radically reworking the whole thing. And yet, though I had more or less resolved to forget about it
and move on, the question continued to gnaw at me. Then I came across this piece
by Remittance Girl, one of the most intelligent, astute, and incisive writers
and critics on the contemporary erotica scene. Needless to say, after hanging
my head for a seemly period of contrition, I’ve made some changes to the story,
and the revised version is available now. I suppose the “moral” of this tale is, ‘always
get somebody to beta read for you.’ As RG points out in her article, “head-hopping”
is something most writers simply do not notice in their own work. Having a second pair of eyes on a manuscript can potentially save scads of time and trouble, not to mention an eternity of abject embarrassment.
NOTES ON USAGE FROM THE EROTIC WRITER'S THESAURUS
When it comes to issues of usage and style, I have
some seriously gnarly pet peeves; probably enough to start a peeve-petting zoo,
or, at least, a peevish-flea circus. For instance, I absolutely hate the word “breakfasted”; so insufferably twee, so pinkies-out
namby-pamby. Yuck! I’d prefer “they ate breakfast,” “they broke their fast” or even (albeit
holding my nose) “they partook of a fine breakfast”. I despise phrases that
include the words “. . . like nothing she had ever known before . . .” or “. .
. more intense than anything he had ever experienced.” But hey! That’s just me.
There are lots of usage questions specific to
erotica, and it’s highly unlikely one will find the answers to them in Fowler’s
Modern English Usage or The Chicago Manual of Style—handy and great
as those references are. I love dipping into Fowler from time to time, if for
no other reason than to be entertained by the editor’s wonderful, inimitably
pugnacious pronouncements on the practice of good English. (Granted, I have yet
to internalize the wise old curmudgeon’s notion that “the essence of good
English lies in the use of short words.”) But Fowler's not much help when it comes to, say, knowing the difference between areola and aureole, or understanding the distinction between come and cum. One of the things I hope will make my
Erotic Writer’s Thesaurus a more
valuable resource to the community is the inclusion of notes on many of these
erotica-specific usage issues.
In its current form, The Erotic Writer’s Thesaurus (see its page for today’s major
update) has a few drawbacks. Among other things, it’s difficult—especially when
attempting to do regular updates—to include clickable internal navigation on
the website. Eventually, I hope to make
this reference available as a very-reasonably priced e-book with searchability
and full internal navigation. If I can figure out how to make the e-book
updatable, I will. (Informed advice on this is welcome.) The usage notes will probably be organized into their own
section, separate from the synonym lists. The notes do represent my own
opinions. I recognize that reasonable people may disagree, though I hope we can
all remain agreeable in the process. Questions, comments or suggestions for addenda
are always appreciated and invited.
Here are a few of the notes from the newly updated
version:
AREOLA versus AUREOLE. Areola (pl. AREOLAE or AREOLAS) is the clinical term for the dark ring of flesh surrounding
the nipple. Aureole, meaning “halo”
or “radiance” (as in “aura”) can be employed as an artsy synonym for areola,
but the two words should not be confused when one endeavors to write prose.
ASS. There is probably no other word in erotic
fiction so often employed out of context or with such careless imprecision. ASS
may refer either to (1) the buttocks or Gluteus Maximus, or (2) the ANUS
(c.f.). The distinction is important insofar as readers need to have a clear
picture of what’s going on in a scene (e.g. She
took off her panties so I could admire her tight little ass. I assailed her
quivering ass. I rubbed my cock up against her sweet, needy ass). Aside
from the obvious, that these are examples of dismally unimaginative writing,
can the reader say for sure what specific body parts are being referenced?
Writers should also take care to use the word in proper historical and cultural
context. While it is ubiquitous in contemporary usage (indeed, many people have
grown up knowing no other word), such was not always the case. The word may sound
perfectly apt on the lips of a Combat Zone hooker or even an adventurous
married couple in the private throes of passion; but probably wouldn’t be quite
so believable in the mouth of a Victorian noblewoman. Earlier generations wore
their reticence like an extra layer of clothing, priding themselves on
propriety and a certain stilted elegance in speech. Our day and age may be a
tad more relaxed (or possibly a good deal less imaginative) when it comes to
vocabulary, but good writers are always sensitive to issues of context and
precision.
ATTRACTIVE people are not necessarily BEAUTIFUL
(c.f.) or HANDSOME (c.f.), though these adjectives are commonly regarded as
interchangeable.
BLUE BALLS describes both a physical and a
psychological condition; that painful soreness in the once-expectant scrotum
comes with a sobering sense of unfulfillment and frustration.
BOSOM and BREASTS are not exactly the same thing, though the words are so frequently confused
nowadays (even by some supposedly reliable authorities) that it seems futile to
point out the distinction. The BOSOM or BREAST (singular) is the general area
of the upper chest taken in as a whole, which includes the pectoral muscles as
well as the breasts and the cleavage between them. BREASTS (plural) refer specifically
to the mammary glands, and are a constituent part of the BOSOM. A woman may be
described as “full-bosomed” or “bosomy”, meaning “full-breasted” or
“large-breasted” but the general distinction remains; BOSOM is the whole
package, BREASTS a distinct feature within that package. And while one may
choose to say “bosom” to mean “breasts”, “bosoms” (plural) is NOT a proper
synonym for “breasts” though it has become fairly common in informal usage or
as slang.
COME versus CUM. A simple rule of thumb for usage in
erotic writing; COME is most commonly employed as a verb (e.g. I’m coming! or He came on her breasts.) CUM
is always a noun, referring
most commonly to the product of male ejaculation (e.g. He shot his hot cum all over her face.) but also, occasionally the
fluid product of female arousal. COME may sometimes be used as a noun, but it
is best to maintain the distinction, and, whatever one choses to do, always
be consistent.
EROTICA versus PORNOGRAPHY (c.f.). The words have
been used interchangeably, their meanings conflated by so many for so long; the
difference (or complete lack of any) debated so hotly without resolution or
consensus, that it seems pointless, now, to make a case for differentiation.
Puritans and prudes will always see smut wherever flesh is referenced, no
matter how obliquely, while many of a more open-minded, sex-positive bent see
no real value in a distinction. It does seem to matter a great deal to writers
and publishers, though, whether due to peevish literary snobbery or mundane
marketing concerns. For the purposes of this reference—focused as it is on the
needs of serious authors—the words are regarded as possessing two similar but
discrete meanings. PORNOGRAPHY deals with objects, focusing almost exclusively
on the purely visible (i.e. graphic)
physical aspects of the sex act. It eschews story, plot, conflict and character
development in favor of vignettes featuring pure action, almost never reflected
upon or analyzed in any serious or introspective way. EROTICA deals with subjects—characters—and
while it may include a great deal of explicit physical description; it also
concerns itself with the feelings and emotions of its actors, usually in a
recognizable, coherent literary form. (No value judgment is implied in this
distinction.)
FEMININE and MASCULINE (c.f.). Given that these
words come with their own noxious freight-load of obsolete values and
discredited patriarchal assumptions concerning gender characteristics, writers
should proceed with some caution. Surely no one having seen an episode of Xena, Warrior Princess or Buffy the Vampire Slayer would be so
foolish as to consider words like “docile”, “soft” or “weak” as universally
appropriate (or even remotely accurate) substitutes for FEMININE. Nor, in this
day and age, does MASCULINE exclusively (or even necessarily) convey concepts
such as “bravery”, “nobility” or “strength”. However, in the name of
thoroughness, a separate subheading has been added to include a list of these
antiquated synonyms.
GIRL. A mature, sensitive and discerning man (or
woman) well knows and appreciates the difference between a GIRL and a WOMAN
(c.f.). Yet, in the most rigidly politically correct situations, referring to a
female of any age as a GIRL is considered insulting and chauvinistic.
Unfortunately, there seems to be no clear rule about when it is or isn’t
acceptable to employ this term for “young female”. Some young females insist on
being spoken of only as WOMEN (c.f.), while lots of reasonably liberated and
mature women have no problem being referred to—or referring to themselves—as
girls. As always, when writing good fiction, let the characters speak honestly
and for themselves.
GLAMOR versus GLIMMER. Both words may be used to
describe magical spells in which persons or things are enchanted in order to be
perceived as something other than or different from themselves. (e.g. The ugly witch glamored the knight, who
thereafter saw her only as a beautiful maiden.) GLAMOR, in its contemporary
sense of artful allure or luxurious attractiveness, is no longer
interchangeable with (and only obliquely related to) GLIMMER, which can be
employed to describe something shiny or highly reflective.
HOT. Possibly the single-most overused word in all
erotic writing; and certainly one of the most misused. Employ sparingly, and
with acute awareness of the word’s two discrete functions. HOT (1.) meaning
beautiful or extremely attractive, is an adjective with dozens of synonyms, and
is easily avoided. HOT (2.) describes the state of being aroused (possibly by
observing somebody who qualifies as hot?) again, with many readily available
substitutes.
KINKY. Almost all synonyms for KINKY are
atavistically pejorative or derogatory. Never mind that many kinky things, once
ignorantly regarded as symptomatic of mental illness or sociopathic tendencies,
have now begun to emerge, if not into the mainstream, at least into a greater
light of understanding. The word, having thus lost most of its transgressive
potency, is synonymous with nothing so much as “a willingness to seem different”.
Someone into a KINKY LIFESTYLE (c.f.) is no longer reflexively condemned as a
pervert; but, more often, hailed as a NONCONFORMIST (c.f.)
LAY versus LIE: Very often confused, especially in
their various tenses, these two verbs continue to bedevil many an aspiring
writer. Simple rule of thumb: To lay
is to put a thing down (e.g. He laid the
girl on the bed). To lie is to
rest horizontally or to recline. (e.g. She
was lying on her back).
PANTIES. Those writers of erotic historical fiction
should be aware that the word did not come into the English language
until 1908, (MWC 11 ed.) and was not in common usage before the
1920s. The British equivalent, KNICKERS did not appear until the very late nineteenth or early twentieth century (the term may or may not be related to the
American “knickerbockers” (1881), a type of gathered short pants.) (MWC) Nothing is more annoying than blatant
anachronism in an otherwise well-written historical narrative.
PRURIENT is regularly employed as a catchall to
describe any sort of illicit sexual feeling or state. In fact, PRURIENT has a
much narrower meaning; a prurient thing is that which inspires or arouses “immoderate
or unwholesome interest or desire.” (c.f. Webster’s
Collegiate Dictionary, Eleventh Edition (2008) (MWC))
SENSUAL versus SENSUOUS: a simple rule of thumb for remembering the difference between
these two very similar, albeit subtly distinct, adjectives; what is sensual
is often sexual; what is sensuous is occasionally sumptuous or
luxurious. In real-world usage, much to the horror of the pedants, the
words have become virtually interchangeable, and in their secondary definitions
at least, synonymous. Still, best not to
use both in too close proximity.
VANILLA. Originating as jargon in psychological and
sexological studies, meant to differentiate kinky sex (i.e. BDSM (c.f.),
fetishism, SWINGING (c.f.)) from more socially conventional activities, VANILLA
has become a popular put-down, akin to labeling someone a PRUDE (c.f.) or a
square. Lately, and, it seems, with increasing frequency and vehemence, the
word has been bandied about as a term of derision for those engaging in (or
writing about) less-edgy behaviors, particularly non-kinky m/f activities. As
is so often the case with rampant bandying, the term has been employed
carelessly, and, on occasion, cruelly. It is not, in fact, a synonym for
HETEROSEXUAL (c.f.) (based on an antiquated assumption that gay sex was
uniquely transgressive, somehow more adventurous or “out there” than straight
coupling). There are many gay and lesbian married couples engaging in perfectly
satisfying vanilla sex every day of the year, and hundreds of millions of
straight people who aren’t into BDSM, LEATHER (c.f.), FETISH (c.f.) or cosplay,
nonetheless managing to enjoy exciting, self-fulfilling sex on a regular basis.
A sexual practice that may be perceived as boring and conventional by outsiders is
often more than adequately exciting to the people engaged in it. (Not everyone
can afford to be choosey after all!) As far as usage is concerned, the term
applies to those who tend not to show off or flaunt their sexuality; don’t “get
their freak on” or engage in kink-related activities for whatever
reason—regardless of orientation. Writers and critics should (we hope) employ
this term sparingly, with some sensitivity and greater compassion. Bigotry is
bigotry, regardless of where it comes from.
(*) SOME UPCOMING REVIEWS (all titles are recommended):
